In the past people usually stayed in one place throughout their life. These days, people often move around. They often live in several different places in their lifetime. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both?

In the past,
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individuals
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area .Nowadays,humans
migarate
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migrate
migrated
around the world regularly .They frequently live in various
places
during their lifetime.These causes that in a hot days period is developing day by day and.In
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and disadvantages of staying in one area and I will give my own opinion. Let's begin by looking at the advantages of moving away.One of the main positives
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that living in several different
places
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broadens people's horizons in their lifetime.What I mean by
this
,
if
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you move
different
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places
and go on to live,
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communicate in more
language
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, and
also
this
situation depends on life.
For instance
,learn to cope with foreign customs and food and
also
,you know how to solve problems by living
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places
When it comes to disadvantages.
Firstly
,
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when
you face to
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the problem
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will
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on
weather
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.
Moreover
,there are
planty
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plenty
of difficulties in various
places
.
For example
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to
USA
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the USA
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many people say that
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living is easy there
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,
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don't agree with that idea,because there will be too many devastating things to people's health.
For instance
,floods,earthquakes,and
forests
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burnings
these
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include another
forcast
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forecast
of nature. In
coclusion
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conclusion
,living another
countries
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area is never easy.You need to weigh up the pros of
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better lifestyle,weather and so on,and
also
the cons of culture shock and language barrier.Personally, I believe the benefits in terms of personal growth eventually outweigh any negatives.
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