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The internet provides us with info about life and cultures of different countries and some say it is not necessary to visit them to learn about them. Agree or disagree?

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Many
people
 believe that
books
,
movies
 and the internet enable them to learn as much about
culture
 as travel does, so they do not have to go on a trip to other destinations for
such
 a purpose.
However
,
while
 I admit that those channels are informative, they fail to provide the
learners
 with the latest
information
 or practical experiences;
therefore
,
people
 still need to go travelling to learn about
culture
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 . On the one hand, there are many sources from which everyone can learn about the
culture
 of a place without visiting there.
Firstly
, they can have more understanding of
cultural
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the cultural
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 traits of a region by reading
books
 that include pictures and descriptions
about
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 that region’s
culture
,
such
 as how they cook their local ingredients or greet foreigners. Documentary
movies
 are
also
 of great help as most of them provide the audience with sound effects, allowing
learners
 to hear the locals’ voices and languages. On top of that,
culture
 can be learned through the internet, on which
people
 can access a variety of video clips or articles published by various travellers, so
learners
 can acquire more diverse
information
 from different angles.
On the other hand
, I believe that it is better for
learners
 to pay a visit to the country whose
culture
 they want to know more about.
Although
 abundant, the
information
 provided by
books
 and
movies
 might soon be out-of-date because the world is always changing, and
therefore
, what was written or recorded a long time ago can hardly ensure its accuracy.
For instance
, new fashion trends and new words are invented every year, so
learners
 ought to travel to learn what local
people
 actually wear and speak in contemporary society.
Besides
,
people
 cannot have hands-on experiences if only
staying
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 home and
reading
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read
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 reviews posted online.
Instead
, they should get directly exposed to the
culture
 they are curious about so that they can have their own experiences and assessments without relying on others’ subjective standpoints. In conclusion, despite the ample source of
information
 from
books
,
movies
 and the internet,
people
 need to travel around to learn better about the
culture
of
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somewhere.
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