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The internet provides us with info about life and cultures of different countries and some say it is not necessary to visit them to learn about them. Agree or disagree?

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Many
people
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 believe that
books
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,
movies
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 and the internet enable them to learn as much about
culture
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 as travel does, so they do not have to go on a trip to other destinations for
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 a purpose.
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,
while
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 I admit that those channels are informative, they fail to provide the
learners
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 with the latest
information
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 or practical experiences;
therefore
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,
people
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 still need to go travelling to learn about
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culture
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 . On the one hand, there are many sources from which everyone can learn about the
culture
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 of a place without visiting there.
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, they can have more understanding of
cultural
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 traits of a region by reading
books
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 that include pictures and descriptions
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 that region’s
culture
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,
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 as how they cook their local ingredients or greet foreigners. Documentary
movies
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 are
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 of great help as most of them provide the audience with sound effects, allowing
learners
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 to hear the locals’ voices and languages. On top of that,
culture
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 can be learned through the internet, on which
people
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 can access a variety of video clips or articles published by various travellers, so
learners
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 can acquire more diverse
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 from different angles.
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, I believe that it is better for
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 to pay a visit to the country whose
culture
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 they want to know more about.
Although
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 abundant, the
information
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 provided by
books
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 and
movies
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 might soon be out-of-date because the world is always changing, and
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, what was written or recorded a long time ago can hardly ensure its accuracy.
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, new fashion trends and new words are invented every year, so
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 ought to travel to learn what local
people
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 actually wear and speak in contemporary society.
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,
people
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 cannot have hands-on experiences if only
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 home and
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 reviews posted online.
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, they should get directly exposed to the
culture
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 they are curious about so that they can have their own experiences and assessments without relying on others’ subjective standpoints. In conclusion, despite the ample source of
information
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 from
books
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,
movies
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 and the internet,
people
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 need to travel around to learn better about the
culture
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somewhere.

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