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Writing Task 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

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There is no denying the fact that there are
alot
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a lot
 of poor nations in the world that suffer from many issues like; poverty and wars.
While
 it is
acommonly
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a commonly
commonly
 held belief that rich
countries
 often give money to poorer
countries
,
but
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it does not
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solve
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 poverty. There is
also
 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that the
devolep
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develop
countries
 should help poorer
countries
 in any way, whether physically or morally.
To begin
 with, the rich
countries
 like;
United
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the United
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 Kingdom and United
State
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States
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 the best and easy way is
cash
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to cash
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deposit
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deposits
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 to
countryies
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countries
 in need.
In other words
,
the
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financial aid can the poor country use it in any
sector
the
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they
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 want to improve it.
In addition
,
this
 can help the country
especially
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 the citizens. For
exampel
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example
, Egypt and
sudan
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Sudan
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both
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are both
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 of
tham
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them
 located in Africa so
the
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they
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 have less
in
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water because of the high temperature in all seasons if
the
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they
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 have money
the
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they
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 will spend it immediately
in
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on
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water
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the water
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sector
. Another point to consider,
the
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is the
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devolep
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develop
 nations it should hold an annual meeting between them to solve poverty and help all affected
countries
. It is
also
 possible to say that
,
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 if the riched
countries
they
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cooperated in various
thing
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things
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 the
strenght
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strength
 in
it they
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them
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 will help them.
Moreover
, European
countries
they
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apply
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are so perfect and good in
health
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the health
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sector
.
For instance
, if they send some doctors and nurses to
countries
are
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that are
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sufer
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suffer
safer
 from wars that can help them to survive. In conclusion, despite people having
diffierent
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different
 types of views, I believe that the governments in all riches
countries
 should focus on one
sector
 rather than give money.
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