Parents should be held legally responsible for their children’s acts. What is your opinion? Support it with personal example.

Many argue that
parents
should take full legal responsibility for their minor's actions. I disagree ,
although
many children's acts are linked to their
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parents
teachings and behaviour, we can't put all the blame on them .Minors have a mind of their own. Even when kids are raised in a respectful household with the right teachings and a good role
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to look up to , some would grow up and take the wrong path in life , for in the end, no one can force someone to be a good person if he or she doesn't want to.
For example
, my dear uncle was born from an amazing mother, a
house-wife
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who always speaks with a smile and a hard-working hard-working father who's never cheap on his family.Despite that , he grew up to be an egoistic teen with a love for driving fast at night, resulting in killing a family of four in a car crash. That's why I believe
parents
should not take all the blame.
However
some homes raise kids in an abusive
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leading them to have mental problems , in
such
cases,
parents
should be held legally, and the child has to be sent to a better environment.
For instance
, the famous Jeffry Dehmer , which in his case would kill and eat multiple people,even though nothing can justify
this
, his father who taught him how to kill and skin animals and his mother who abused him
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a daily matter should take some of the blame. in conclusion, in most cases
parents
can't be held legally
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for the actions of their child,
however
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there are some situations where there held responsible.
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