In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by fast food. This has a negative impact on families, individuals and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is often suggested that the growth of fast
food
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is being replaced
traditional
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by traditional
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foods
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and
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negative
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a negative
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impact on families,
individual
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individuals
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and societies. In my opinion, I completely agree nor disagree with
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viewpoint for
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a variety
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of
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reasons
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. On the one hand, I partly agree with the drawbacks of the
replacing
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replacement
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of fast
food
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with traditional
foods
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.
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means that
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fast
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fast-food
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food
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industrialization is more and
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growing.
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of
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phenomenon, traditional
foods
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don't appear a lot in the storage and customers will find it
hardly
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.
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is because
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convenience of fast
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, just 2 minutes and you will have a hamburger at the fast
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restaurants
such
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as KFC, Mac Donalds,...
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, the obesity in
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the population
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especially children increased dramatically. One of the good
illustration
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of
this
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is the report of WHO about the obesity of children
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in
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United
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the United
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States, which country owns
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a variety
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of fast
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brand
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brands
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.
According to
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the report, there are 34%
children
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of children
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at
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in
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USA
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the USA
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obesited
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obesity
in 2020,
doubled
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with
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in
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the early of
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century, when fast
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isn't populated.
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, I strongly disagree with the viewpoint that the
replaced
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replacement
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of fast
food
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create
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creates
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disadvantages for societies, families and individuals. The main reason is
that
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the convenience of it and it is in line with
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industrialization nowadays.
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is because
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great amount of
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work
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to do
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daily.
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, we don't have enough time to cook and prepare
a meals
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meals
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.
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, fast
food
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is a great
ideas
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with plenty of energy, delicious and
convenience
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convenient
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.
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,
developed
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in developed
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country
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countries
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such
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as Germany, Japan,
USA
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the USA
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,...
the
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apply
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fast
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restaurants are populated and spread over their
contries
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countries
because of their people's needs. WHO reports that the rate of fast
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restaurants in that countries
always
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up to 35%. So we can see the spreading of it. In conclusion,
although
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there are a lot of arguments about the negative effects of the
replacing
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replacement
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of fast
food
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with traditional
foods
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, I'm convinced that it
is
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also
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has some advantages too.
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