In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some think that the government has the responsibility to solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I strongly agree that as

children

are becoming overweight and unhealthy the

government

has the responsibility to solve

this

problem

. The below information describes to what extent I with agree

this

.

Firstly

,

as

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nowadays

the

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children

are becoming overweight

as well as

unhealthy

due to

fast

food

and junk

food

.

Due to

extra eating and too much eating

children

face

this

type of

problem

. The

government

should increase

tax

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on junk

food

so the

children

prefer to eat more and more healthy

food

.

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, the Nation should make

rule

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a rule

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that

while

going to

a

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institution the students should only eat healthy

food

as well as

eat

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eating

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vegetables.

However

, just extra eating is

also

a

problem

but being more and more comfortable lifestyle is

also

reason

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the reason

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for unhealthy.

Government

should make

rule

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a rule

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the

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that

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children

should do more and more

exerices

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exercise

. The nation should

rule

rule

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that

everyday

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every day

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there should be

an

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sports class for a student at the school and the institution should teach them yoga

also

. The country should promote NGOs

who

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are spreading awareness about

eat

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eating

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healthy and

stay

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staying

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healthy.

For example

, if

state

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the state

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will support NGOs

then

it will be benefits

for

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both state and

public

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the public

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because young people are the person who will make the nation

growth

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and development.

To conclude

, the above information

describe

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that

at

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to

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what extent I agree to

the

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it

even

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is even

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the governmnet

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governmnet

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government

responsibility to solve the

problem

about

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of

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overweight and unhealthy

for

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apply

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children

. If the

government

will make some

rule

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rules

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it

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apply

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the

problrm

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problem

can

be solve

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be solved

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easily and fast.