The maps show the developments which took place in the coastal of town Laguna Beach between 1950, 1970 and 1990.

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The provided image illustrates the differences resulting in advancement over three certain years in the coastal of town Laguna Beach.

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, it can be seen that residential buildings were developed continuously,

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, the waterfront still remained in the south of the town.

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with, the track in 1950 had transformed into the road two decades later.

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, there is a significant feature, it is that woodland was destroyed and a caravan park was constructed in 1970. To be more detailed, shore huts had been remodelled into villas in the same period.

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, there are several improvements in 1970. Primarily, Vilas was reconstructed into hotels and sound dunes which existed same places for a long time, landscaped gardens had

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, the surf school is located on the coast next to the car park that was a caravan park 20 years before.

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, a pool had built between the hotel and the road.

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The maps show the developments which took place in the coastal of town Laguna Beach between 1950, 1970 and 1990.

Schools should only offer subjects that are beneficial to students’ future career success. Other subjects, such as music and sports, are not important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Trying to save endangered animal species from extinction is a waste of valuable resources.Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think it is mỏe important to spend money on roads and motor ways than on public transport systems such as railways and trams. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many young people do not spend their holidays and weekends doing outdoor activities like hiking and climbing in natural environments. Why is this the case? How can they be encouraged to go out?