The bar chart below illustrates five different industries' percentage share of Brazil's economy in 2009 and 2019 with a forecast for 2029.
The given chart represents data about the percentage share of five
industries
in Brazil in the periods of 2009 and 2019, with the addition of a prediction for 2029.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the finance and energy sectors are types of industries
that make up a large proportion of Brazil's economy
compared to the other three industries
.
In 2009, the finance sector contributed about 30% of Brazil’s economy
, and it grew to just over 35% after a decade. The increasing trend is expected to continue in 2029 since the finance industry will contribute more than 40%. The tourism and energy sectors had the same proportion about 25% in the period of 2009. In 2019, the tourism sector had the same balance of approximately 20% as predicted for the decade after, while
, in 2019, the oil, coal and gas industries
experienced an increase to 30%, and, in 2029, the fuels industry is predicted to decline to the same value as the starting point.
The manufacturing industries
noted the percentages of contribution in the Brazilian economy
approximately
20% in 2009, and the decade after, it declined slightly to 15%. Change preposition
at approximately
However
, in 2019, the trend is expected to decline significantly to 5%. Finally
, the food processing industry witnessed 10
% contribution to the Correct article usage
a 10
economy
of Brazil, and they expected to have the same balance by 2009 as in 2029 until there was a gradual movement to go up about 20% in 2019.Submitted by iqiqbalbal14 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words industries, economy with synonyms.
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