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Many people think student should spend time working before university study. dicuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people think that
students
 should spend time working before going to
university
.
Therefore
, in
this
 essay, I will look at two main reasons for whether or not to get a
job
 before
college
. On the good
side
, the first reason
if
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students
 have
job
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a job
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 before
university
 study,
students
 can
will
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apply
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have
many
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much
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 knowledge
in
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of
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 their jobs. When
students
 graduate
university
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from university
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, they have a good
job
 with
high
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a high
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 salary and have
stable
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a stable
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 life. The second reason, when
students
 do
job
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the job
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, they can find and have many relationships in their
job
 which help them in the future when they finish
university
. For
examples
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 for two reasons, in Vietnam
majority
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the majority
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 of
students
in
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apply
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here
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her
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 work before
university
 study because they
want
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won't
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have
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to have
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 few
moneys
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amounts of money
sums of money
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 to help
their
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with their
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 school
fee
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fees
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 so they worked in small
restaurant
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restaurants
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 or
store
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stores
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.
Besides
 that, they still have a wide social and their relationships can have them in the future. On the bad
side
, when
students
 have not yet gone to
university
 but they have gone to work. They can not prepare knowledge for
university
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a university
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 program which make them unstable in
the
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their
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 background knowledge. Because of that when they go to
college
, they can not absorb the lesson effectively and they may not understand the lesson and their grades will drop, worst of all they do not graduate from
college
. In conclusion, two
reason
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reasons
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 with the good
side
 and the bad
side
 for
problem
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the problem
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 about
students
 should spend time working before
university
 study and I think
students
 should get a
job
 before
go
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going
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 to
college
 is better.

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