The diagram below shows a simple system that turns dirty water into clean water. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make Comparisons where relevant.

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The given diagram illustrates the construction of a basic

water

filter

in order to produce potable

water

. Looking from an

overall

perspective, it is readily clear that the diagram has 5 main steps, beginning with impure

water

following

Wrong verb form

followed

show examples

by a variety of physical steps and ending with drinkable

water

from the tap. The system consists of two separate containers connected by a pipe. The first tank is covered by a circle lid and filled with three layers containing sand, charcoal, and gravel. The other one has the role of storing treated

water

. Regarding the cross-section

filter

, it is a three-stage

filter

contained in a single 200L metal container.

Firstly

, the impure

water

is poured into the first tank, after which it goes through the first stage sand

filter

Then

, the

water

is filtered through the second stage which is made of charcoal.

Subsequently

, the

water

that passes through the final layer in the filtration process is tiny pebbles before being passed through the drinking

water

storage tank. Users can get

water

from the tap.

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4Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
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1Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

174 words

6.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Diagram
Simple system
Dirty water
Clean water
Overall process
Input
Output
Comparison
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