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Somepeople think that the government should make university education free for all students, regardless of their financial situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days
, public debate has been going on over whether the
government
 should make tertiary
education
 free for all
students
. I tend to believe that higher
education
 should be free – for the following reasons. Three main factors support the idea of free
university
education
. The primary factor we need to take into consideration is that many
students
 cannot afford
university
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education
,
although
 they truly want to get degrees. Obviously, without enough financial resources, these
students
 have to give up their dreams, which is unfair to them.
Besides
, the
government
 is already wasting taxpayers’ money on projects
such
 as space exploration by making spaceships – the fund should be spent on
university
education
. That is to say, the
government
 would be well-advised to allocate resources in a more sensible way. A third reason for my belief is that high tuition fees may prevent some
students
 from studying at
university
. It is widely recognised that many young people are reluctant to face their loans after graduation, which means
such
 a burden might make
university
education
 less attractive. I admit that
students
’ financial contributions to higher
education
helps
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 universities to improve facilities. Despite that, a more reasonable
government
 funds allocation can solve
this
 issue, for which we can find plenty of evidence from our own experience. In conclusion, I would argue that tertiary
education
 should be paid by the
government
.
Accordingly
, it would be generally advisable for the
government
 to allocate financial resources in a more beneficial way.
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