1.Some feel that governments should prioritize healthcare instead of other important areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is often said that governments should treat
healthcare
more seriously rather than other Use synonyms
areas
. Personally, I disagree with Use synonyms
this
opinion; Linking Words
although
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healthcare
may seem a sophisticated area, it is not really more important than other Use synonyms
areas
.
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Healthcare
Use synonyms
determinedly
needs to be cared about, but the Rephrase
apply
government
should not Use synonyms
put on
Verb problem
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
concentration
on it and neglect Replace the word
concentrate
there
other Rephrase
apply
areas
. One Use synonyms
such
area is Linking Words
education
. Use synonyms
Education
is a key factor Use synonyms
to evaluate
society’s quality. Change preposition
in evaluating
For example
, in developing countries, a lack of Linking Words
education
can result in high levels of poverty and unemployment. The most suitable example I believe is Africa. Most of the people who Use synonyms
lived
in Africa have not been educated in an appropriate way. It leads to an issue that people lack intellect and lose competition in the world. The contrast, in Japan, the Wrong verb form
live
education
system Use synonyms
there
is incredibly effective. Each inhabitant in Japan has a high quality and intelligence that could improve the whole nation to Correct pronoun usage
apply
the other
position. Fix the agreement mistake
another
Consequently
, The two ultimate examples can see how important Linking Words
education
is.
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On the other hand
, I believe Linking Words
government
already works as hard as it can on Use synonyms
healthcare
. Medical equipment has been innovated dramatically, we can see by the average age of the population, Use synonyms
the
elderly population is obviously higher than teenagers. Meanwhile, they have neglected other Correct pronoun usage
that the
areas
quite a bit. Use synonyms
For example
, Taiwan’s property prices have surged in the Linking Words
last
two years. As I see, the prices certainly are being manipulated by either one humanity or an organization. It has been quite a Linking Words
while
and I have not noticed the Linking Words
government
makes any movement yet. Graduates who stepped into society in recent years are experiencing the strain that finances bring and I think it could be solved if the Use synonyms
government
has awareness.
In conclusion, Use synonyms
it is clear that
health care is an essential human right and deserves importance. Ultimately, the key is to find a sustainable and equitable approach that benefits everyone.Linking Words
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