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Some people think paying taxes is a big enough contribution to their society, while others think people have more responsibilities as members of society than only paying taxes. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Although
 some
people
 say that taking certain percentages of income to pay taxes is huge enough to contribute to their country; in my opinion, I believe
people
 have greater responsibilities as members of society.
To begin
 with, there is a point I have to agree with:paying taxes is the responsibility of the public
while
 utilizing the money to create a peaceful and rich society will be the duty of the government.
Hence
, under
this
 corporation dynamics, the authority should strive to improve the happiness and economic status of the county.
Additionally
, it
also
 has to put every effort to execute related policies to enhance the power of competition of the country compared to other rivals.
For example
. in the 1970s, Taiwan's authority constructed many infrastructures
as well as
 built science parks, which increased the employment rate and improved
people
's lives.
However
, the government can't provide high-quality services without the dedication of the
people
.
For instance
, during the COVID-19 pandemic, the government hustled to produce and purchased vaccines to fight viruses. Meanwhile, lots of local companies
also
 donated parts of their income to buy medicines, masks and other necessities. They took social responsibility and help Taiwanese
people
 who went through a bad time. In conclusion, despite that both arguments have their merits, I believe that society will become better with
people
 taking more care than they should .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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