The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.
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The two diagrams illustrate how
cement
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and concrete are produced by adding some materials.
Overall
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, there are five stages for producing
cement
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that begins with passing the limestone and clay through a crusher and ending with packing
cement
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into bags.
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concrete production has a lesser extent stages. Limestone and clay are blended and passed through the crusher to produce the
powder
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.
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produced
powder
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is entered into a mixer. Next stage, the
powder
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is heated by the heat
at the end
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of the rotating heater cylinder and rotates. Before packing
cement
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into bags for distribution to the markets, the
powder
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is passed on to the grinder to produce soft
cement
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. The right diagram shows that four materials are combined that the gravel has the biggest share among others with half of the share.
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, water (10%),
cement
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(15%), sand (a quarter of all share), and gravel are mixed in a concrete mixer.
Next,
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the concrete mixer rotates to produce fine concrete for building purposes.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cement, powder with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • construction
  • cement-making
  • raw materials
  • crushing
  • mixing
  • heating
  • grinding
  • cement powder
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • concrete
  • versatility
  • strength
  • aggregate
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