The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints and passengers.

The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints and passengers.
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The bar charts give information about the punctuality of a bus company and the number of
complaints
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that comes
accordingly
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from 1999 to 2003.
Overall
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, the company only managed to outrace the target
at the end
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of the period, in comparison to previous years in which the company could not reach the target at all.
Number
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A number
The number
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of
complaints
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followed fluctuations throughout the period. In 1999 and 2000, the targetted percentage of services arriving on time was 86,
while
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the actual arrival rate dropped from 85% in 1999 to 82% in 2000, which reflects the biggest gap on the chart. The targetted rate decreased
firstly
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to 85%
then
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to around 84.5% till the end of the period.
Number
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A number
The number
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of
complaints
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per thousand passenger's journey started
with
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at
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approximately 70 in 1999 and rose
up
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to 100 in a year, in comparison experienced a slight decline to merely 85 in 2001. After that, followed an upward trend and hit the high point of 120
complaints
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in 2003.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words complaints with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • punctuality
  • target versus actual performance
  • correlation
  • consistency
  • trends
  • passenger numbers
  • complaints
  • assessment
  • measures taken
  • impact
  • effectiveness
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