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Research shows that the performance of staff can have a significant impact on the success of a company. Therefore, companies should focus on improving employee productivity. How far staff performance can ensure the success of a company? What can companies do to increase staff productivity?

Research illustrates that the
performance
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 of
staff
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 can have
a
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 important influence on the
success
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 of a
company
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.
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 ,
companies
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 should concentrate on enhancing
workers
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workers'
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productivity
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. In my opinion,
staff
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performance
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have
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 a huge impact on
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success
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the success
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 of a
company
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. I believe
companies
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 can do many things to
boosts
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staff
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productivity
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including
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, provide financial
rewarding
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,
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and provide a positive environment for the
staff
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.
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staff
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performance
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have
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considerable
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a considerable
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affect
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 on the
success
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 of a
company
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.
This
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 is because tasks
on
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in
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 the
workplaces
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workplace
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done
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are done
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 by
employees
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.
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, if
staff
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 feel
happinees
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happiness
toward
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 their jobs they are more likely
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work
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 from heart, which
mean
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the
productivity
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 among
employees
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 will increase.
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, if the
performance
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 of
employees
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 who
work
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 in
makerting
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marketing
 enhance they will provide
a better services
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a better service
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 for
company
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 customers.
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, more customers will buy products from
companies
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, which
mean
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companies
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 can earn a lot of money.
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, I would like to suggest some things
companies
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 can do in order to
raising
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staff
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productivity
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The first
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 thing,
companies
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 can offer plenty of incentives for their
employees
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 namely, high salaries, promotions,and
high quality
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 insurance.
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, these incentives can motivate workers to
work
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 hard and perform well in their responsibilities in
work
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. The second thing,
companies
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 can provide a positive environment for their
employees
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.
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,
companies
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 can reduce the number of
work
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 hours, which
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this
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can
mtigate
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mitigate
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staff
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.
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, less stress
mean
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 more
productivity
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 among
employees
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.
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, From my perspective ,
staff
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performance
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have
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has
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greater
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a greater
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 impact on
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success
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the success
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 of a
company
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. I believe
companies
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 can do many things to enhance
staff
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productivity
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including
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apply
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, offer financial
rewarding
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rewards
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, and
provide
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providing
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 a positive workplace for the
staff
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.

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