Some people think that we sould replace old buildings and houses in cities with more modern buildings. Other people think we should protect old buildings. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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consider that we should protect old buildings

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old buildings and houses is a way of recycling.

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of workers in a town. I remember when the building was made in the zone near my house I can see a lot of workers all day.

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believe that we should protect old

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we could maintain the architecture of the place and we could take care of the environment. I

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. Faithfully, Francisco Gonzalez

Submitted by franciscogonzalezrusso on Wed Aug 02 2023

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