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The bar char below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002-2007.

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The bar chart illustrates how many
hours
 adolescents in Chester spent on seven activities each week between 2002 and 2007.
Overall
, the most popular activity over the period given was watching TV,
whereas
 bowling was the least favourite. Going to pubs and discos, watching TV and shopping all showed an increase in the number of
hours
teenagers
 spend on these activities. The other pursuits showed a decrease in
hours
, except watching DVDs which fluctuated.
Teenagers
 spent 25
hours
 watching television in 2002 and it
then
 increased to almost 40
hours
 in the final year. Both going to pubs and discos
,
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 and shopping more than doubles in
hours
 from over 5 to over 15 and from over 15 to exactly 15 respectively.
While
teenagers
 occupied 10
hours
 doing homework in 2002,
this
 figure dropped to just over 5 in 2007. Playing sports fell more dramatically from 10
hours
 to around 3
hours
. Bowling was under 5
hours
 throughout the entire period declining by about 4
hours
 in total. The number of
hours
teenagers
 dedicated to watching DVDs was only 10
hours
 in the first and final years
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 but reached a peak of over 15
hours
 in 2004 and 2005.
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