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Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when travelling, etc.). Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,
due to
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 rapid growth in technology, IT workers are able to do
work
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 from remote places like at
home
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 or
while
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traveling
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. In
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 essay, I will briefly explain
about
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their positive and negative impacts. On the one hand,
Due to
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 the advancement of Information technology working hours become flexible for workers. Allowing employees to
work
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 from
home
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 for a few days will decrease their stress levels and increase their performance at their
work
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. It is very helpful for women employees during their periods days.
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 during pandemics like Covid -19, we have so many IT companies giving permission for their staff to
work
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 from
home
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, so it didn't affect companies' positions and people were able to earn in those times.
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, it might be helpful and easy for them to
work
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 outside the workplace but, it's
also
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 important for them to balance their personal life.
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 working at
home
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, they tend to forget the
time
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 and
work
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 late hours and follow an irregular diet
time
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 which affects their health. Some people have late-night shifts which break their sleep schedule, and
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 that they tend to neglect workouts.
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 a person does
work
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 from
home
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, he might not have
time
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 to spend
time
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 with his family. I would like
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 by stating that, remote place
work
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 might give flexibility and make
work
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 easier sometimes, but we should give
time
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 for our personal relationships and we need to maintain a proper diet and do regular workouts to have a healthy mind and body.
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