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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects, other people think that in today's word, subjects like science and technology are more important than history Discuss both views and give your opinion

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A number of
people
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 argue that
history
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 is one of the most essential subjects in school,
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 others believe that subjects related to
technology
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 and science are more crucial in the present era.
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 studying
history
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 is not necessarily bad as it allows
students
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 to acknowledge their backgrounds and ancestors, in my opinion, disciplines in the technological and scientific sectors prepare pupils for their
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 careers and,
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, are more important. On the one hand,
history
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 gives
students
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 an opportunity to research their forerunners and learn about human behaviour in general. Various historical events indicate certain behavioural patterns
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 as herd instinct and etc. Other than that, for some
people
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 it is important to know their roots mostly for religious purposes.
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, in Hinduism studying historical events related to your ancestors is as important as caring for your family. Disallowing
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 opportunity may trigger or disappoint a lot of
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.
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 I think heavily implementing
history
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 in classes will negatively affect pupils'
future
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 prospects in various fields.
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, disciplines with technical themes increasingly play a role in today's world where
people
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 need to be well-prepared for continuously developing technologies. Studies of
technology
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 in school can greatly help in accustoming
students
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 for their
future
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 jobs as they create a foundational understanding of
technology
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 and equips them with needed skillsets.
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, the IT sector is evolving by
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, and only those who can adapt quickly are able to make a good salary.
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, I believe it is more important to teach subjects related to science and
technology
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 in schools. In conclusion, even though
history
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 is crucial for some
people
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 for different reasons, in my opinion, heavily focusing on technological and scientific classes is more essential as they provide more help in
students
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'
future
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 careers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • critical thinking
  • historical analysis
  • contemporary challenges
  • economic growth
  • medical advancements
  • technological literacy
  • interdisciplinary
  • well-rounded education
  • intangible insights
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