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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

Nowadays, there is an increase in the number of
people
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 seeking out
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information
 about their accommodation historical background. There are several reasons for
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trend
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as well as
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 methods to satisfy their curiosity. In
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 with that, I will provide various
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 to explore
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 interest.
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trend
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 can be observed when
people
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 are inspired by the plot of the film or books after watching or reading them, especially stories
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revolves
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the
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house
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 of the main character with
secret
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 mechanism.
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 filled full of
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mechanisms
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 that
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 hidden
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and
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 contain lots of
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assist
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 them in their
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 as an agent.
As a result
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, readers and viewers become curious and
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 if their
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house
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houses
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 have the same appliances.
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 encourage them to do research about their
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 construction and development and the historical
information
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. Eventually, they will share the progress of exploring their own
house
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 on several internet platforms which inspired others to contribute
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this
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. For
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 purpose, it is totally effortless when looking for
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information
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 with the advancement of technology in
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 world. Some ways
such
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the previous
house
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 owner for
information
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 are no longer tricky since the internet has connected
people
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 around the world despite
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considered
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 geographical distances.
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, plenty of documentaries and TV series
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 clarified the structure of houses, especially the
one
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 with hidden mechanisms and how to recognize them,
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 can be
an extremely helpful sources
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 of
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 when
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 around their houses. In conclusion, the increasing interest
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history
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the history
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 of houses
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 caused by films and movies and
others sort
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other sorts
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 of entertainment by arousing the curiosity of the residents. The enormous
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 from the internet and its connection
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 effectively helped
people
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 who
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 of
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trend
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.

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task achievement
Your essay generally addresses the task effectively, but you need to ensure that all main points are fully developed and relevant to the topic. Consider adding statistics or more specific examples to strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
The essay is mostly logically organized, but some ideas could be more clearly linked. To improve, you can use more transition words and phrases to guide the reader through your points.
coherence cohesion
While your introduction and conclusion are clear, ensure that they fully encapsulate the main ideas of your body paragraphs. Try to summarize your points a bit more precisely in these sections.
organization
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which makes it easy to follow.
task achievement
You have included relevant examples that help to illustrate your main points effectively, such as the reference to 'Kingsman' and documentaries.
conclusion
The concluding paragraph summarizes the essay well and reinforces the main arguments presented in the body.
Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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