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People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Animals raised for slaughter live in deplorable conditions, often riddled with diseases, which is inhuman. So
humans
 should stop eating
meat
.
This
 essay completely disagrees with
this
 view because
meat
 is a rich source of protein, which provides health benefits for the body, and
humans
 are omnivorous. The main reason is that the structure of your
teeth
 demonstrates that
humans
 are omnivorous, or able to eat both animals and
plants
, because our well-defined incisors, the front four
teeth
, molars, and premolars are like the
teeth
 of herbivores, designed to cut through and grind
plants
,
while
 your canine
teeth
, the sharp ones next to the incisors, are like those of carnivores, designed to rip through flesh.   The second reason is that
plants
 don't provide certain nutrients that products do. One
such
 essential nutrient that you can't get from
plants
 is vitamin B12, which is necessary for the normal function of the nervous system and the formation of red blood cells. Vegans and vegetarians may have nutrient deficiencies. Other nutrients that may be difficult to obtain on
such
 diets include protein, iodine, zinc, and calcium, which is why
meat
 is so important for
humans
. In conclusion,
Although
 some may think they should not consume
meat
 because of cruel farm factories,
meat
 is a main source of nutrition for
humans
 since they are omnivorous.
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