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In the past, knowlege was contained in books. Nowadays, knowlege is uploded to the internet. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#knowlege #books #internet
It's true that books were the main source of getting
knowledge
 in the past.
However
, in today's fast-paced the
Internet
 assembled all the
knowledge
 I believe that
drawbacks
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 of the
Internet
more
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 than its benefits. There are a number of good points of learning from the
internet
. One of these is that the
internet
 enables
students
 to enter a wide range of
knowledge
. It gives us unlimited access to find information, saving our valuable time is another benefit of making use of the
Internet
.
For instance
, individuals are able to find the details about scientists easily.
Furthermore
, it accelerates the way people get
knowledge
. Carrying a phone or an iPad is more comfortable than carrying 10 different heavy books inside the classroom.
On the other hand
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there are more cons to utilizing the
Internet
 for educational
purpose
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. First of all, it's more likely to be a huge distractor to truly studying.
Students
 who cannot control themselves will be easily addicted to the
Internet
. Because it is based on more entertainment purposes than educational. How many celebrities, and pop artists on social media
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can get
students
' attention from studying
.
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Moreover
, the
Internet
 fails to provide the authentic meaning of learning and cannot give a real atmosphere as
book
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 does.
Finally
, the
internet
 might cause some health problems related to
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 and vision deficiencies
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be appear
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on
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students
 who overuse the
internet
.
To sum up
, as our world develops, the way people search for
knowledge
 has changed. People now get
Knowledge
 by means of the
Internet
, in the past everyone built their
knowledge
by
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 books. I think the
internet
 has more disadvantages than pros.
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