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Some people think that the main purpose of schools is to teach children to be a good citizen or worker rather than to benefit them as individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Everybody knows that
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 time is very important in
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's
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. Everybody learns
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 begins in
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such
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 as relationships, friendly, coulter, economic system e.g. that's why I disagree schools goal is only to be a good citizen or worker. İ
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 has some reasons.
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schools give us politicians
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, economists, doctors or engineers. İf we don'
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 go to
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 that couldn'
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 be
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 job.
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, Ali is from Ankara he went to
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 and won a medical university and he is a good doctor now. İf he thought of
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 only for being a worker or a good citizen, can he be a doctor?
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schools aren'
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 only for jobs, İ
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 mainly pass time with friends, learning
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 through games ( because we begin
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 by games in
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) learn some of our coulters at
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.
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, many
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 go to
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then
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 finish
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 and they don'
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 do special work
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 contusion
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. many
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 merit with a friend of the
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. İf they didn'
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 go to
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while
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 they didn'
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 meet their wife or husband.
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, every
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 must go to
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 until the 12th. class, it is rool in many countries. İn my opinion,
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 is very important, every country have to make power their education system, it is very important for a developed country.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pedagogical approach
  • civic responsibility
  • vocational skills
  • holistic development
  • critical thinking
  • emotional intelligence
  • personal interests
  • community involvement
  • effective employees
  • educational institutions
  • societal norms
  • personal growth
  • competent citizens
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