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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced

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In
this
 modern era, waste and waste management is a pressing problem in developing and developed countries. These days, the human population increasing rapidly and because of that, we need more production in every area.
However
, In the future,
this
 situation will be aggravated.
Nevertheless
, if the
government
 takes some actions
then
 it will manage smoothly. In
this
 essay, I will discuss reasons for occurring more debris and what actions
government
 should take to less rubbish production.
To begin
 with,
this
 time we can see an uncontrollable birth rate in the
last
 few years in some countries because
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that industry's reach skyrocketed.
Moreover
due to
 the increasing human population at an alarming rate, solid waste is a by-product phenomenon. To add to more that, modern life is
practiced
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 through away culture. As the name suggested, people are less interested in using repaired commodities.
Instead
, they dispose
old
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 projects and buy new merchandise. There are a plethora of steps that the
government
 should take to spread awareness.
Firstly
, use reusable bags
instead
 of using one-time plastic bags because plastic not only counts in more rubbish but
also
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 very harmful to the environment.
Secondly
, the parliament should run
the
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campaigns to educate and spread awareness about producing unnecessary debris.
Last
 but not least, the country should use recycling methods, as it is very beneficial to reduce litter. In conclusion, the rise in population is the primary factor for the increasing litter, Another attribute is through away culture followed by the human race. The
government
 can take many measures to fight
this
 problem by reducing plastic production, by encouraging for using eco-friendly products.
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