The chart below gives information on the average cost of a monthly plan from four different mobile phone providers in a European country, between January and September 2012, measured in euros.
the provided line graph demonstrates the rate of the monthly cost for four types of cellular phones for
nine-month
plan Add an article
the nine-month
a nine-month
during
2012 within Europe.
Change preposition
in
Overall
, it is evident that the chart showed a constant fluctuation along with
regular growth at the end
of the period.
To begin
with, Despite Demo depicting the highest average at
January accounted for 15 Change preposition
in
euros
, and over the period showed climbing to register the highest point in July 25
Change preposition
at 25
euros
, but abruptly declined again to record just under 25 euros
in September. in
Capitalize word
In
the
contrast, Correct article usage
apply
while
Alpha started with the lowest rate at January exactly at 5 euros
, the price rate remained slightly stable until June. Suddenly, the product rocketed to hit the peak, finally
registered
the highest cost of Wrong verb form
registering
25euros
in September.
Correct your spelling
25 euros
Furthermore
, Sim TX in comparison with Lex had embarked with a marginal fluctuation accompanied by moderate growing
. Replace the word
growth
However
, Sim TX has been overtaken by Lex at Jane, but both nearly
just under 15 Add a missing verb
are nearly
euros
, bringing them to end
with opposite trends. Correct article usage
an end
whereas
SimTX finished with touching the lowest cost boasting merely under 10 euros
, Lex contributes almost over 15 euros
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