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The line graph illustrates the average emissions of carbon dioxide by each person in several countries in Europe from 1967 to 2007

The line graph illustrates the average emissions of carbon dioxide by each person in several countries in Europe from 1967 to 2007
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 Line chart shows the average emissions of
carbon
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dioxide
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 per person in four countries in the UK. They
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the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal respectively. it was between 1967 to 2007. for the period from 1967 to 2007 the chart shows that the United Kingdom was the highest
intake
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 and the lowest
intake
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 of CO2 was Italy and Portugal but it increased a lot in the
last
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 40 years. In Italy and Portugal in 1967, the
intake
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 of C02 was 1 metric tonne and 4 metric
tonnes
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 respectively, over the years both countries increased the
intake
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 of C02. It stops
at the end
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 period of the year 2007. The average from all the counties in the
last
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 decade that
carbon
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dioxide
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 emit was 5.5. More than 8 metric
tonnes
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 of
carbon
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dioxide
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 were emitted in 1967, it rose to 10.5 metric
tonnes
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 in 1977 and decreased sharply between the years of 1977-1987 from 10.5 to 7 metric
tonnes
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 and it decrease more until in 2007 the C02 level emitted was 5.
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, the United Kingdom had a downfall of
carbon
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dioxide
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 in the given period.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, intake, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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