Modern lifestyles are completely different from the way people lived in the past.Some people think changes have been positive by others believe they have been negative.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The living patterns of
people
are changed totally as compared to the previous time. It is because of technology and advancement which has gained
place
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in everyone's
life
. Folks have different opinions on it, some said it is positive
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life
so easy and comfortable but, I think it has some worse effects on
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the human
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human
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they are isolated as compared to past time . On the one hand,living standards are enhanced far better
then
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which
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is unimaginable, everything is on the
fingers
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tip everything looks one step away from the
people
.
People
can travel and communicate very fast nowadays which is really helpful. They can cure any disease with the help of medical science.
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, in Covid 19, it was
aviruse
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a virus
which
maked
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people
ill and they
sufferd
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suffered
suffer
with
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it and died but, the scientists cured it with
a
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medicine and saved many lives.
On the other hand
,
modern
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style of living makes
people
self centred
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and put them in a shell where they are alone with their pain without any
emotion
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support. It is because of
busy
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the busy
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and hectic schedule of
people
they don't have time for their loved ones. That's why, they forget the real feeling of happiness in the race of money.
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, in
UK
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college did a survey, they found children are facing
lot
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of problems because their parents are not doing proper attention to the children which makes them sad and
emotional
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weak. In conclusion,
although
modern
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the modern
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life style
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lifestyle
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gives more freedom to live
life
according
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our way, it
is fail
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to tackle all the problems where
people
suffer more
problem
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problems
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like
feel
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isolated and
metal
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mental
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issues.
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