The chart below gives information about how many European citizens of various age groups frequently went to the gym from 1990 to 2010.

The chart below gives information about how many European citizens of various age groups frequently went to the gym from 1990 to 2010.
The line graph shows the percentages of Europeans in four different aged groups who took part in gym activities regularly from 1990 to 2010. In
overall
, the percentages of people aged 18 to 23 decreased
while
those of other groups increased significantly. The
figure
for the 44 to 53 age group was higher than that of others. The percentage of the 44-53 age group started at over 15% in 1990, which was the highest proportion,
while
the proportion of people between the ages of 18 and 23 stood at the lowest point (5%). Over the next eight years, the
figure
for 44-53 rose gradually to over 25% in the final year of the period. The percentage of 33-to-43-year-olds had a substantial growth from 1990 to 2006, rising from 15% to reaching a peak at 25%.
Then
,
this
figure
fell to about 18% in 2010. In 1990, gym visitors aged 24-33 and 18-23 stood at 7% and 5%, respectively. After 4 years, both groups experienced slight increases until 1998.
While
the percentage of the 24-53 age climbed to 10% in 2010, the equivalent
figure
for 18-23 saw a steady decline to approximately 6% at the same time.
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