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The local council has decided to build a block of flats on the park opposite the place where you are living Write a letter to the editor of the local newspaper protesting this development of a beautiful and necessary green space in your town Make suggestions for what people can of should do to stop the development.

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Dear Sir or Madam I am writing
this
 letter to bring to your
attenmtion
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attention
 that
local
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the local
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council
 of
kent
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Kent
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 has decided to build flats
on
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in
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park
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the park
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 . The
propsed
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proposed
 development will destroy
green
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the green
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 belt in our vicinity and promotes pollution. The green
park
 is
oxygen
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an oxygen
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 zone and
cater
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 to
large
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a large
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 population of our town .All kinds of people like
youngster
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youngsters
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 and senior citizens enjoy in
park
. the
park
serve
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 as
recreational
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a recreational
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 space for
entire
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the entire
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 town. Constructing flats
on
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 the
park
 will kill the green space.
However
, we can stop
this
 development to protect
park
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the park
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. we can organise
protest
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a protest
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infront
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in front
 of
city
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the city
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council
 office. for
that
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 we have to
asemble
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assemble
 people for protest.
Furthermore
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 we can plan
hunger
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 strike
too
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to
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infront
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in front
 of
city
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the city
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council
. That will make
city
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the city
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council
to
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apply
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reconsider their
decsion
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decision
 to make
falsts
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faults
fasts
on
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to
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park
 space. looking forward to your response. Yours Faithfully Martin Crow
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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