The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European City in 1960, 1980, and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European City in 1960, 1980, and 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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the changing patterns of
transport
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used in a European city from 1960 to 2000.
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,
it is clear that
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the
use
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of the car as a main of
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dramatically increased over the period,
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the others fell. It can be seen that in 1960 the car was used least as a method of
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with only about 7% of the
population
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using
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method but car
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grew strongly to
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reach well over 35% of the
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by 2000.
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this
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same period the popularity of walking, which had been the most popular means of
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with 35% of the
population
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in 1960 having it as their preferred way fell to 10%. It is noticeable that bicycle
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fell from a high of about 27% in 1960 to just 7% in 2000. It is noticeable that bus
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was more popular with almost 20% of the
population
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in 1960 and rising to a peak of about 27% in 1980 before falling back to about 18% in 2000.
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