The line graph compares the employment rate in the USA and how this rate changes over the course of 8 decades starting from 1930.
The line graph compares the
employment
rate
in the USA and how this
rate
changes over the course of 8 decades starting from 1930.
Overall
, it is obvious that almost the proportion of objects in the graph increased with the exception of the industrial and other services employment
rate
over the period of 80 years. Moreover
, the figure for industrial employment
was the highest in most years.
In the first year
, the employment
of industry accounted for the largest with nearly 80% while
that of other services was just about 10%. In the following decade, after a gradual decrease of 10% in the industrial employee rate
in 1970, it diminished to approximately 3% by the year
2010. In terms of the percentage of other service employees, there was a small increase of 5% in 1940, but it dropped in 1950 to the same level as it was in the beginning year
, after which the figure leveled
off and remained relatively unchanged throughout the remainder of the period.
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levelled
and
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employment
rate
, they ranged from 0 to 10% in 1930. After many minor fluctuations, the figure for industrial and technical employees rose and roughly converged at 35%, while
that of sales and office employees climbed slightly to precisely 20% in the last
year
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