Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In line with the shift in time, there are growing concerns about the number of
subjects
and knowledge
for university students
in each course as well as
major. while
there are a variety of increases in students
’ demand for adding another
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another subject
other subjects
subjects
into their main subjects
, i
partly agree with the idea that it is Change the capitalization
I
also
essential to focus on studying for qualifications.
On the one hand, it is no secret that in order to maintain and improve the student’s knowledge
backgrounds, it is a need for university
to be responsible for Add an article
the university
help
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helping
students
gaining
more aspects of their courses by some means. the primary reason behind Wrong verb form
gain
this
could be the applicability of each course for post-graduate students
in order to increase the job seeking
opportunity. Add a hyphen
job-seeking
Moreover
, in these modern days, there are a number of students’
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students
job
are not Correct pronoun usage
whose job
relate
to their major, down to the fact that early adults nowadays tend to be influencers or Wrong verb form
related
job
that Add a missing verb
have job
relates
to digital marketing rather than vocational jobs in some ways. Change the verb form
relate
however
, it is only valid for
Change preposition
to
some
certain Correct determiner usage
a
extends
.
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extent
on the other hand
, students
should also
pay a large amount of attention to their main subjects
in order to gain a form background knowledge
for their future jobs, it is fathomable that it is important for students
to mainly focus on one major. it is clear to the naked eyes
that paying attention to one subject could help Fix the agreement mistake
eye
the
Correct article usage
apply
students
to save time in gaining enough knowledge
before applying in
reality. on top of that, Correct pronoun usage
it in
subjects
which are high
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highly
theorical
subject, Correct your spelling
theoretical
such
as medical
, require Replace the word
medicine
students
to study a lot. Because of that, adding more subjects
could left
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leave
students
in
mental problems, Change preposition
with
due to
the fact that students
could have to handle strain and stress to consume such
a big amount of works
and information. in Fix the agreement mistake
work
another words
, Replace the adjective
another word
other words
this
could be a drawback for students
to attend a course that had more subjects
involved.
Having thought about this
issue in some depth, i
have come to the conclusion that even adding more Change the capitalization
I
subjects
to the main subject could help students
to develop their knowledge
background and flexibility in future job
seeking opportunity
, Fix the agreement mistake
opportunities
this
could be a disadvantage for students
when it could lead to student’s mental illnesses due to
the amount of information they have to handle.Submitted by thucbiapluto on
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