The increase in the production of consumer goods (food, clothing) results in damage to the natural environment. What is the cause of this? What can be done to solve this problem?

Globalisation and modernisation
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led to
increase
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in the consumption of consumer goods
such
as food and clothing.
Consequently
,
this
caused a toll on the natural environment via pollution, forest encroachments and
wild-life
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wildlife
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poaching.
An increased
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demand
of
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food and clothing in the past 2 decades
casued
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caused
a
vaccum
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vacuum
in supply, which was later filled
unethical
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practices,
expoitation
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exploitation
of
loop-holes
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loopholes
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in the jurisdiction and
creation
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of illegal markets. The
money hungry
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organisations tried to meet the
demans
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demands
demand
with any means possible, including bribery and crime. We have
also
seen a rise in exotic furs, different animal meats and
cusines
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cuisine
. In the past decade, many countries have
subsequently
banned a
lot
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kinds of meets and
wild life
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wildlife
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poaching, just to protect the animals brought to
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brink of extinction by human activities.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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