The graph below gives information about the percentage of the populationin four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the populationin four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.  

Write at least 150 words.
The line graph illustrates the trend of the proportion of the total
population
who are living in the
Philippines
,
Malaysia
,
Thailand
and
Indonesia
over the past 50
years
as well as
the predictions for the future 20
years
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the
population
in
Malaysia
,
Thailand
and
Indonesia
, except the
Philippines
, is in fluctuating trend. It is
also
noticeable that the
Philippines
is the highest
population
in 1970,
while
Malaysia
will become the highest
at the end
of the predicted period. In 1970, around 30% of the total
population
come from
Malaysia
,
whereas
the Philipines is slightly higher than it, at roughly 31%. After 20
years
,
Malaysia
's
population
rises rocketed by around 15 percentage points, to around 45%. Compare to the
Philippines
, it is essentially unchanged in the first 10
years
but dramatically rises to 47% in the following 10
years
, which surpasses
Malaysia
.
In contrast
, both the
population
of
Thailand
and
Indonesia
are lower than 20% of the total in 1970, and
Indonesia
is fewer amounts of people, at around 13%. The figure for
Indonesia
has a significant increase through the period, and passes the proportion of
Thailand
and the
Philippines
in 2000 and 2010, respectively.
Moreover
, 20
years
later,
Malaysia
will rise to account for the highest proportion to 80% of the total, followed by
Malaysia
and
Indonesia
, at around 60% and 52% respectively
as well as
Thailand
will be the
last
one, which is only half of the total
population
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, philippines, malaysia, thailand, indonesia, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rises" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage of the population
  • urbanization
  • trends
  • predictions
  • compare/comparisons
  • notable patterns
  • anomalies
  • rapid urbanization
  • relative stability
  • economic development
  • government policies
  • migration patterns
  • significant changes
  • ranking
  • urban population
  • overall trends
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