The graph below gives information about the percentage of the populationin four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the populationin four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the trend of the proportion of the total
population
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who are living in the
Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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and
Indonesia
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over the past 50
years
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as well as
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the predictions for the future 20
years
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the
population
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in
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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and
Indonesia
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, except the
Philippines
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, is in fluctuating trend. It is
also
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noticeable that the
Philippines
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is the highest
population
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in 1970,
while
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Malaysia
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will become the highest
at the end
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of the predicted period. In 1970, around 30% of the total
population
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come from
Malaysia
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,
whereas
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the Philipines is slightly higher than it, at roughly 31%. After 20
years
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,
Malaysia
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's
population
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rises rocketed by around 15 percentage points, to around 45%. Compare to the
Philippines
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, it is essentially unchanged in the first 10
years
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but dramatically rises to 47% in the following 10
years
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, which surpasses
Malaysia
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.
In contrast
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, both the
population
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of
Thailand
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and
Indonesia
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are lower than 20% of the total in 1970, and
Indonesia
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is fewer amounts of people, at around 13%. The figure for
Indonesia
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has a significant increase through the period, and passes the proportion of
Thailand
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and the
Philippines
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in 2000 and 2010, respectively.
Moreover
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, 20
years
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later,
Malaysia
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will rise to account for the highest proportion to 80% of the total, followed by
Malaysia
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and
Indonesia
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, at around 60% and 52% respectively
as well as
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Thailand
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will be the
last
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one, which is only half of the total
population
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as".
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, philippines, malaysia, thailand, indonesia, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rises" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage of the population
  • urbanization
  • trends
  • predictions
  • compare/comparisons
  • notable patterns
  • anomalies
  • rapid urbanization
  • relative stability
  • economic development
  • government policies
  • migration patterns
  • significant changes
  • ranking
  • urban population
  • overall trends
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