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The illustrated two pie charts exhibit the data about a bus company's service which are shown in reality and their goals as well as clients' protests.

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the illustrated two charts exhibit the data about a bus company's service which are shown in reality and their goals
as well as
 clients' protests. It is clearly seen that in the beginning punctuality had shown higher performance than others.
In addition
, in 2003 they experienced the most complaints. As the information suggests, the company had inaugurated with the top percentages as 85 and 86 proportions of actual rating and aims respectively.
Then
, their real illustration dropped to 82,
while
 the target remained stable in the 21st century. After that,
rating
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 was gradually upgraded and finished with almost 85
percent
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. Moving on to the second chart, it can be
obviously
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 that
in
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 the end of the twentieth decade, amount of claims
were
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 nearly 70, having the lowest number of negative emotions.It evolved
till
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 exactly 100 in 2000, after which had
the
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 minimum number
as
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 over eighty amount.
Then
, they
had
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increased
number
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 in the final years and ended up with 120, being the leader
which
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 had tons of
hates
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.
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