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In the past, knowledge was contained in books. Nowadays, knowledge is uploaded to the internet. Do the advantages outweigh the decides?

#books #internet
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the
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earlier timers, education was included in
books
,
however
, knowledge is uploaded to the
internet
 these days. there are more advantages
of
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this
 than disadvantages It's true that in the past many
people
 were
learned
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 with a lot of
books
 because the
internet
 was not invented at the Time.
For
this
 reason, many human beings
was
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were
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 more skilful in the past than nowadays. They always focused on
books
.
For example
,
newton
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 was a really clever and qualified person without the
internet
. He
was created
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has created
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 a good chance and new skills for
this
 and
also
 generations for developing.
Therefore
, as many
people
 said,
books
 are our best friend. And
also
books
 give good condition and relax us. Nowadays
books
 are
also
 common. Most humans use it during the lessons all in their homes.
On the other hand
, the
internet
 is developing day by day. Numerous humans around the world preferred to download
books
 and want to learn things on the
internet
. It is right that the
internet
 has a numerous amount of knowledge.
However
, it affects
people
's minds and eyes.
Although
, learning new things with the
internet
 is faster and
convenient
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 than
books
. So, learning with
books
 is superior to studying on the
Internet
.
For
this
 reason,
books
 are still used in schools and universities.
To sum up
, nowadays many
people
 read
books
, even though studying is faster with
Internet
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • democratization, accessibility, socioeconomic barriers, dissemination, real-time, misinformation, misleading, necessitating, over-reliance, traditional knowledge sources, collaborative learning, interactive, engaging educational experience
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