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In the past, knowlege was contained in books. Nowadays, knowlege is uploded to the Internet. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#knowlege #books #internet
Information in the
books
 which were used past now are in the
the
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internet
 and I believe disadvantages outcome its advantages. Many people take advantage of the
Internet
 in their studies for many reasons. The first benefit is that the
Internet
 is available almost everywhere nowadays, so it is easy to carry a telephone for getting
knowledge
 than
books
. In addition , many students prefer the
Internet
 simply because they are cost-effective , contains information in any field and
believes
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 they can find
books
 in pdf formats of any
books
 .
For instance
,in studying English students get their material through
Internet
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 for entirely free. Despite the benefits above, I think it causes poverty somehow as people utilize
the
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books
 on the
internet
 book press companies may be closed and many people will lose their sources of money to maintain their families In ,fact the
Internet
 does not offer the highest
knowledge
. University education systems do not give their information online and all their education system is based on
books
Lastly
,a lot of
Internet
 websites release different data related to one article and readers may be confused as to what to believe and will not be able
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get genuine,
knowledge
.
However
,
books
 are checked by government scientists before they are pressed.
To sum up
,
,
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nevertheless
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 online
knowledge
 is cheap and portable, and
books
 are the most reliable source of education.
knowledge
.
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