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The given bar graph shows the estimated continent-wise increase in food production (in million MT) needed to feed the world population in 2045. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar graph shows the estimated continent-wise increase in food production (in million MT) needed to feed the world population in 2045. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented block graph clearly depicts
approximate
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the approximate
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 rise in the production of
food
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 required to cater
the
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for the
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food
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 requirement of
world's
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the world's
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 population for the year 2045.
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, the data is calibrated in numbers. At a fleeting glance, it is evident that Africa needs to produce the highest in order to sustain its population,
whereas
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 Europe
is has
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 to produce the least among the five continents. To take a deep look, 400 million MT, which is the highest among all the continents under study, is needed to be produced by Africa to meet the dietary needs of its population in the year 2045.
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, it needs to produce 4 times more than
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South America, which has the
second highest
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food
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 requirement of 100 million MT. To add more details, among the remaining three continents Asia has to necessitate its crop production in order to meet the demand of about 90 million MT,
while
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 North America needs to cultivate nearly half of
this
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 quantity.
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, Europe is self-sufficient with almost
neglible
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negligible
requirement
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requirements
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 for
food
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.

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