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There is no denying that in the twentieth century academic acknowledge has a great role in the society.There is no denying that in the twentieth century academic acknowledge has a great role in the society.

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There is no denying that in the twentieth century academic acknowledge has a great role in
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society.
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 a multitude of factors that distract pupils from their education,
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 as technological devices and
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mebers
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members
 of their family. Causes and solutions will be written in the following paragraphs. Destroying
student's
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 concentration can be done straightforwardly by some actions .
For instance
, it is able to be disrupted when they are dependent on their electronic gadgets as a mobile phone
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 a laptop. With
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asisstance
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assistance
 of them, they can spend their time for nothing, just
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scrolling down social media.
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it, it is grating sounds which are located near to them. It can be explained
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 the fact that there might be irritating sounds which are made by their classmates. Regardless of
such
 reasons, there are exact panaceas as moral strength and trying to not utilize electronics. First of all, if
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 is really ready to focus on their academic
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, they will stand against that downsides and will stand against them.It can be straightforwardly understood by the term as a moral strength. Except
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 it, there is another
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resolution
 as rejecting all their devices with a willingness. It is one kind of dopamine to be addicted to them, it will not be easy for them to achieve that. Taking everything mentioned
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account,
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can be complicated at
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 time. As it was mentioned earlier, there are causes
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 and surrounding circumstances and formulas as
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 ready to prevent it and try
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their
 best to disallow all types of electronics.
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