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Many cities are now turning parks and farmland into new housing developments. Is this a positive or negative development?

#cities #parks #farmland #developments #development
Parks
 and farmlands offer
an
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amazing
landmark
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 for residents,
as well as
 lead to
provide
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healthy
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a healthy
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 lifestyle. A large number of cities are replacing public gardens and farmyards with new
accomodations
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accommodations
. From my
viewpoint
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 its positive
impacts
 cannot overcome the negative
impacts
. To start with, public
parks
 play a crucial role in
people
's daily lives by offering a marvellous landscape. In
other word
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, it promotes residents to escape from their workload hours. To exemplify, after a tedious and hard work day,
people
 can delve into a
quite
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 depth of
parks
 or relax
with
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 occupying some activities in
farmland
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the farmland
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.
Moreover
, the process of replacing play arenas and farmsteads with stunning skyscrapers and new apartments would have
negative
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 effect on the environment. It leads to
vanish
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 trees and plants,
thus
support
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supporting
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 to increase
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of carbon-dioxide
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carbon-dioxide
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carbon dioxide
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 in the air.
For instance
, by far growing of
townbuilding
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town-building
town building
, after a decade we will have destroyed
biodiversity
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the biodiversity
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 of living things.
On the other hand
, a number of
people
 prefer to live in urban cities, since it provides them with
vast
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a vast
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 amount of modern apartments,
as well as
,
it
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attracts a range of tourists.
For instance
, resting at
parks
 or farmyards can be
bored
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 for some
people
 who prefer to relax
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in at
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at
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a
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 modern-designed building or
using
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 a high-level elevator. Tourists
also
 appreciate well-designed city projects and it supports
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the economical
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economical
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 condition of the country. In a nutshell, from my point of view, creating
green
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a green
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 world in your city provides you with
menthal
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mental
 and physical health,
therefore
public
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the public
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 should be aware
for
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of
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the preservance
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preservance
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preserving
preservice
 of public
parks
 and farmhouses,
while
 for some
people
 it has a positive effect on
renovating
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renovation
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 procedure. From my
viewpoint
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 its positive
impacts
 cannot overcome the negative
impacts
.
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