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Universities should accept equal number of male and female students in every subjects . to what extent do you agre or disagree

#universities #students #subjects #agre
Some of the universities around the world have seen that the college admission priority has been preferably given to the males
then
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 females. In doing so, it isn’t
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 for the females; rather equal opportunity has to be provided for both
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genders
while
 doing admission
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colleges
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 their subjects. I do agree with
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equality despite the challenges faced by
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humanity.
To begin
 with, in the learning stages whatever subjects,
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are taught in the classes, should not be
gender
bias
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. It has to be learned and applied practically by the students. Given the chance irrespective of
gender
, all have the capability to learn and perform at maximum level.
Therefore
 In
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schools or
colleges
, everyone should be aware of sensational talks on
gender
 inequity treating
girls
 as average performers. Some people argue that in certain
colleges
 like, engineering
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, admission priority has been given more to
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males than females, considering that
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girls
 possess less intellectual capability. In that instance, social stigmatization
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gender
 inequality will continue to prevail. To prevent
such
 disharmony in
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society equal opportunity has to be given to both
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sexes.
For
instance
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 in some
colleges
the
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girls
 have overtaken some of the male students that’s why now the number of female pilots
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 on
rise
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.
Further
 more people believed that
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girls
 are physically incompetent against men. Given the chance and their effort in combating wrong statements against them, nothing showed impossible for women to prove them wrong. Nowadays in
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military
colleges
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 the number of female army officers
are
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 on the rise, showing people that offering
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equal opportunity is
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.
To conclude
, as I have mentioned in the above paragraphs both
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gender
 have equal mental and physical capability to learn and bring changes in the system.
Hence
 all the
colleges
 and schools should accept
same
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 number of male and female students in all the subjects.
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