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Nowadays many people suffer from lack of sleep what are the causes of this phenomenon o What are the solutions

#people #lack #phenomenon
Sleep deprivation has spread among human beings.
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several
 issues caused by it
such
 as
decline
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decrease
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of
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 people's
productivity
. To
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tackle
take
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the
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awareness among the
mumbers
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members
 of society, doing exercises. Less quality sleep is one of the biggest issues we face in the 21st century.
Therefore
 , it
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 to
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the destoration
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destoration
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restoration
destruction
 of our brains, especially
from
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by
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 Youth who are
at
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 their eighteens and
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fourteens
fourteen
.
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instance
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 Research papers show that youth at
this
 age are suffering from
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bipolar
 disease. To explain, It is a disease that makes people
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 and
seeing
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see
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 Some things that are not true just depend on their
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prospects
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 So
productivity
 in the world will decline as our brains are not working. at a suitable way. The first solution to
this
 situation is to
makes
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 People pay attention to their sleep. , because
with out
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without
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 it the
word
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world
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 will suffer.
This
 is by bringing our
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children
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children's
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children
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 from
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apply
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the
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birth to have proper sleep,
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and making
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making
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 a daily routine
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to
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for
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 them. For
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examples
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 parents academically mother ought to make a night shower daily routine for
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their
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her
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their
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 baby, so he will go to a
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deeply
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 sleep easily.
more over
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moreover
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 when they become
schools
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school
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 age, parents should
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to
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make them
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go
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going
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 to the gym
doing
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to do
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 exercises .
Hence
 The
productivity
 of the community members will boom again. In conclusion, poor quality sleep has become one of the most popular problems in all the houses in the societies, leading to less
productivity
 and more Allen's to associate with.
this
 situation, we must work on increasing
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our knowledge
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 and
practicing
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practising
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 any physical work activities.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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