The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK.

The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK.
The
chart
demonstrates the proportions of different contemporary technologies in
UK
households between 1994 to 2008.
Overall
, the proportion of all four technologies increased during the period,
while
DVD players were the latest-appeared but the fastest-grown device among all. The CD player was first seen in 1994/95, owned by 40% of
UK
families,
then
it began to rise until it reached its peak in 2004/05, with nearly 90% of
UK
families having it.
In addition
, the mobile phone was introduced in 1996/1997, starting at 18%,
then
it began to fluctuate and saw an improved trend until 2004/05 at approximately 80%
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while
remaining stable for the rest of the period. The Internet didn’t show up in the first two time periods
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but appeared in 1998/99 with 10% usage in
UK
homes,
although
it saw a gradual increase, in the final year in the
chart
, it was the least-owned technology by
UK
households (67%). The DVD player was the latest product among all the technologies in the
chart
,
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it was the fastest-increased during the time period. Started in 2002/03 at only 30%,
then
it saw a significant increase and became the most popular product in the
chart
in 2008, with almost 90% of
UK
families owning it.
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