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Some people believe that charity organisations should help people wherever they live, others thinks they should attend their countries only. Discuss both and give your opinion.

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In today's society, voluntary work has become a matter of significant concern. Some
people
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 argue that countries should take part in
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organisations
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 on a global scale
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 others believe
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 communities should only focus on their local
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 who are in need. In
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 essay, I will examine both perspectives before presenting my own opinion. On one hand, those who support universal
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organisations
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 argue that undeveloped and poor countries need more assistance rather than local citizens.
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, African countries have been suffering from basic needs
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 as food shortage, clear water resources and disease for a long time and these individuals have no adequate resources and technology to handle tough living conditions.
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 suggests that volunteers should draw attention to these
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 who suffer from life-sustaining resources.
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, proponents of local
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 have asserted that each country must take into account its matters because there are already citizens who have difficulties reaching basic needs
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 as shelter, food and education. An illustrative case America even is known as the richest country in the world there are a huge array of homeless
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 who live on the street.
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, the government and voluntary
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 should be responsible for their citizens. Having considered both perspectives, I firmly believe these
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 companies should be responsible regardless of nation.
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 and harsh conditions. In conclusion, the issue of
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 has valid arguments from both sides.
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, after weighing the evidence, I am convinced that volunteering
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 should take a step for these
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 who are reliant on others.
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