The pie chart below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Fairmont island, according to a survey of visitors

The pie chart below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Fairmont island, according to a survey of visitors
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The pie chart provides information about the most basic benefits and drawbacks of Fairmont
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island
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according to
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a survey of
visitors
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.
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, the most common problematic thing was food quality
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the
island
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,
meanwhile
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visitors
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found local people most liked and advantageous. Food quality is depicted under half of the pie chart as a main disadvantage and another third of the pie chart belongs to
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entertainment. 20 per cent of people
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claimed to dislike about
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cost of living,
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however
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11% of
visitors
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were satisfied with a good
accomadation
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accommodation
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Also
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40% of travellers liked the
island
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citizens
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37 per cent of
visitors
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enjoyed
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the scenery.
Island
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culture
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attracted 12 per cent of
visitors
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, visitors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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