The pie charts below shows units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000

The pie charts below shows units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000
The pie charts give
the
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information about the total production of
units
of
electricity
in
Australia
and
France
by the different fuel sources (coal,
oil
, natural gas,
hydro
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hydropower
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power
and nuclear
power
) in the year 1980 and 2000.
Overall
, the total production of
electricity
in
Australia
was higher in both the year (100units and 170units respectively) than the French which was 90
units
in 1980 and 180
units
in 2000. Coal is the main source in Australian cities.
However
,
France
used nuclear
power
.
Although
Australia
did not use
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nuclear
power
. In 1980,
Australia
generate 50
units
by
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coal, and 10
units
from
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of
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oil
.
Although
nuclear gas and
hydro
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hydropower
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power
produce the same
amount
of
units
which was 20. In
France
the least
amount
is by water which was 5
units
and 15
units
were produced through nuclear
power
.
Although
natural gas and coal made 25
units
of total. In 2000, 170
units
of
electricity
were produced in
Australia
while
in
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France
produced 180
units
. Coal generated
the
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130
units
in total in
Australia
which was the highest
amount
and the least was produced through
oil
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the oil
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which was 2
units
.
However
,
electricity
generated by water was 36
units
. Nuclear
power
was the main fuel source used in
France
to generate
electricity
126. Coal and
oil
made the same
amount
of
electricity
25 approximately.
However
, the least
amount
was produced by water.
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