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the plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps illustrate before and after the refurbishment of Grange
Park
 in 1920 when it first opened and now.
Overall
, we can see that there are a lot of changes that happened after reconstruction,
while
 just a few
parts
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 unchanged. In 1920, in the north of Grange
Park
 near Arnold Avenue there were two
seats
, two rose gardens,
a
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 entrance and a pond. in comparison with today, the entrance has not changed, and two
seats
 were destroyed. One rose garden still remained, another one changed its function to a cafe and
instead
 a pond which was used for water plants
play
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 area for children was built.
on the other hand
, in the south of the
park
 near Eldon
Street
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 there were a glasshouse, three
seats
 and a rose garden.
Moroever
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However
, in the middle of the
park
 there were a fountain and a stage for musicians. compared with today, all
seats
 moved to the middle of the
park
 with a rose garden.
instead
 of the stage, an amphitheatre for concerts was built.
Also
, the glasshouse was removed and a water feature was added.
In addition
, an Entrance underground car
park
 near Eldon Street was added.
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  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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