the diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The flowchart diagram illustrates the process of how the instant noodles are created from the
raw materials.
Overall
, it is a complex and long process, with 8 steps from storage the
flour to labelling and
sealing.
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First,
the flour is transported from the storage silos by trunks. Then
, it is mixed with water and
oil and they become the dough. After the rollers, the shape of the dough is become the sheet.
Next,
cut the dough sheet into the
strips Correct article usage
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by
the cutting machine and Change preposition
with
its
are separated into the
noodles discs. Its are cooked and dry to prevent the food spoiled. After cooking and drying, its
are put into Correct pronoun usage
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the
cups with vegetables and spices. Correct article usage
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Finally
, the cups are sealed and labeled
with
package. In Change the spelling
labelled
this
step, the instant noodles are finished and got ready to sale
in Replace the word
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shop
.Add an article
the shop
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