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People who read for pleasure in their free time have a better imagination than those who prefer to watch TV. Agree or Disagree?

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people
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 think reading
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increase
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people
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 because
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the book
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 is a great source
for
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knowledge
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whereas
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those who
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 watch
Tv
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 does not have better
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quality
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waste
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 of time .I think both sides have
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. On the one hand, Book provides us
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huge amount of
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 . There are many
story
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storybooks
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books
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 which help to raise creativity
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 into us. By reading those
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 we start to think differently ,
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starts
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 observing things around us .
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 the growing
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quality
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change
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the
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outliik
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outlook
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ours
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 and provide us
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oppoetunity
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opportunity
 to explore the talent to become
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, by reading Human
Ahmad
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 story
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people
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 will start thinking
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differently
 like him and
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 will try to
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adopt
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 the creativity
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 into themselves which will help to improve
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imagination
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 power.
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have
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 lots of shows , some are useful for us
some
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 are bad .
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 , many educational and entertainment show helps us
to
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not only
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 our
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quality
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inspires
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 us to participate
into
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 them .
TV
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 gives practical
knowledge
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whereas
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book
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books
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 give
imagination
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knowledge
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spelling
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the spelling
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 bee and
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Indian
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the indian
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indian
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 Idol show are inspiring many children to
perticipate
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participate
 into that and those are improving the creativity
quality
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 as well . But
TV
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 has many
distraction
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 which is
waste
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a waste
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 of time and
also
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 has
bad
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a bad
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 impact on
people
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 . In conclusion , watching
TV
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 and reading
books
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 both helps us to improve our
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quality
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different
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 way .
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However
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TV
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 has more
distraction
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 but If we will avoid those
then
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It
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 can get
advantage
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an advantage
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 from it . For
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this
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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